FLASH FICTION:-- HORROR, SCI-FI, HUMOUR, CRIME, SLICE OF LIFE, ETC.

Friday 8 October 2010

Darklings (A darkening world Part 2)

A darkening world (Part 1)

* * * * * * * * * *

(A darkening world part 2)

There was a time when our kind could exist in only the deepest, darkest holes and caverns beneath the ground.

As the death-bringing, skin-scorching suns above began to die, so our world grew.

We emerged, bred, and flourished in our new kingdom, as more of the hated skyfires dimmed and finally darkened, we swept across the Nightland.

The detestable Lightlings flee from us, they run from the silky life-giving blackness that sustains our eternal existence. They scamper to remain in their searing heat-filled slice of this planet, desperately clinging to the clawhold left to them.

Yes, they run....

And we follow.

We follow, watch, plot, and wait.

Be afraid Lightlings, we will feed on your fear, for we are here, just one step beyond the light's edge.

We will have you, and your piece of this world. Soon.... Very soon.

Your only remaining sun has begun to flicker, just as the others did.

The time of the Dayland is almost done.

Our time is near.

And we are hungry.

----------------

A darkening world (part 1)
Darklight (A darkening world part 3)


©2010 Stephen. J. Green.

26 comments:

  1. Oh, the Darklings are much more sinister than I imagined from last week's post.

    ReplyDelete
  2. I love the creepy aspects of this. This warning to the Darklings is very potent.

    ReplyDelete
  3. Thanks for commenting Rachel, I'm glad that you liked it.

    ReplyDelete
  4. Wow. That was scary. My favorite words were:
    "silky life-giving blackness that sustains our eternal existence." Yikes.

    ReplyDelete
  5. Outofthewastebasket, Thank you for reading, I seem to be ticking the boxes I aimed for with this.

    ReplyDelete
  6. Deliciously creepy and ominous. Just the way I like my flash.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Thank you for reading and commenting Laurita, I seem to be drifting more and more toward this short dark style now.

    ReplyDelete
  8. Reminded me of the morlocks, nice piece of post apocolypitical fiction. You could imagine a figure watching from a cavemouth, pretty creepy.

    ReplyDelete
  9. Thanks for reading and commenting Adam, I hope one day to have the same impact that you did with 'A story of my early days'

    And I also hope that I can give the gracious replies that you did if it ever happens. :-)

    ReplyDelete
  10. Great sequel! Wonderful prose. Nicely done.

    ReplyDelete
  11. Glad that you liked it Ganymeder, Thanks for reading and commenting.

    ReplyDelete
  12. Ominous is the right word. Very well written.

    ReplyDelete
  13. Placebythefire, thank you, I'm very new to this, and I am really pleased at how my stories have been accepted.

    ReplyDelete
  14. Just now read last week's post with this one and I like the voice of a Lightling followed by the Darklings. The Lightling sounded as a single voice part of other voices, that is, unique (personal-use of "I" introduced at the end), while the Darkling sounded like a collective ("we") voice. I love that contrast and, if playing off "normal" symbolic conceptions of light and dark, very apt.

    ReplyDelete
  15. Hi Melissa, I wrote the first one as a stand-alone story, but after the responses I decided to add to it, and the way Darklings was written was the way I heard the narrators voice in my imagination, a predator not a grazer.

    Hi Eric, John has a good point, the preacher's voice does work very well.

    Thank you both for reading and commenting

    ReplyDelete
  16. Hi Steve. I love the descriptions, lyrical at times. I'll go and read the prequel now. And I'll look at this again with the preacher's voice but I can imagine Richard Burton's deep, ominous tone very well..:)

    ReplyDelete
  17. Oh I'm so glad you did this. I love it, and do hope you continue this.

    But, I think it needs read in a female voice. :)

    ReplyDelete
  18. Very cool. I can feel the darkness creeping in just in reading this... :D

    ReplyDelete
  19. L'Aussie, Crystal and A.S.Boudreau, Thank you all for your very kind comments, I think everyone reads stories with an inner voice that they think suits the story, also depending on who they picture the narrator to look like. :-)

    I may put a third, or even fourth species into this story some time in the future. :)

    ReplyDelete
  20. I thought the voice was interesting. I agree with Wiswell; there is a southern preacher sound to it. Liked this. Great balance to last weeks post.

    ReplyDelete
  21. Thanks for reading and commenting G.P. The preacher voice does seem to be a popular choice. :-)

    ReplyDelete
  22. Ooooh, Darklings eh? Marvellously ominous. Love the idea of the suns going out one by one until.... MUNCH

    ReplyDelete
  23. Haha, Hiya Maria, thanks for popping in. :-)

    ReplyDelete
  24. Hi Steve, that was very creepy. Well done you.

    ReplyDelete
  25. Hi Rebecca, thank you for reading. :-)

    ReplyDelete
  26. Love the voice here and it's viewpoint seeing everything cleanly from the dark.

    ReplyDelete