FLASH FICTION:-- HORROR, SCI-FI, HUMOUR, CRIME, SLICE OF LIFE, ETC.

Friday, 29 June 2012

Dangerous words

The story was an absolute killer.

As he read the opening line the hook sank deep into his nose, puncturing gristle and cartilage and slicing completely through to the other side.

He was drawn kicking and screaming into the plot as the storyline developed.

As he reached the end of the final paragraph, his face split, bones fractured, snot and blood geysered, iron-hard knuckles repeatedly slammed into him as he was beaten to death by the punch line.


©2012 Stephen. J. Green.
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28 comments:

  1. Helen A. Howell29 June 2012 at 03:51

    Wow that was some book! Nice visual writing there Steve! This is definitely a story with a punch! ^_^

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    1. Steve Green29 June 2012 at 17:56

      Thanks Helen, it's definitely one to leave on the library shelf. :-)

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  2. John Wiswell29 June 2012 at 05:41

    Good skewering of our melodramatic sales language.

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  3. John Xero29 June 2012 at 07:10

    Ha! Gruesome stuff. Nice one, Steve. =)

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    1. Steve Green29 June 2012 at 17:59

      Thanks John, I like the mixture of gruesome and humour...

      Maybe I should call it "Grumour" ? Hmmm... I wonder if it could be a new catchword?

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  4. Sulci Collective29 June 2012 at 08:26

    Folio folio wherefore art thou folio? Not a romance then? Excellent, can't wait for the sequel!

    marc nash

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    1. Steve Green29 June 2012 at 18:01

      Definitely not a romance, Marc.

      I think for many readers of the first one, the sequel may have to be read posthumously. Bwuhahahahahaha!

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  5. Tim VanSant Writes29 June 2012 at 08:36

    Ouch! Nicely done, but still ouch!

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    1. Steve Green29 June 2012 at 18:02

      Thanks Tim, Sorry about the ouch, I'll send you some ointment and sutures through the post. :-)

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  6. Deanna Schrayer29 June 2012 at 14:22

    Wow Steve what a superb job you've done at describing our reading life. And in so few words - bravo!

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    1. Steve Green29 June 2012 at 18:03

      Thank you Deanna, I hope your own reading life doesn't include the novel that this guy was reading. :-)

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  7. Natalie Bowers29 June 2012 at 22:22

    Definitely ouch! Vivid and visceral.

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    1. Steve Green30 June 2012 at 11:57

      Thanks Natalie, I hope the hook didn't hurt TOO much. :-)

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  8. Larry Kollar30 June 2012 at 03:27

    Now that was a story brought to life! A page-turner, a gut-churner, a big red barn-burner!

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    1. Steve Green30 June 2012 at 11:59

      Thanks Larry. You've heard the phrase "Getting your nose into a good book"? I think this time someone went a little too far. Heheh!

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  9. Peter Newman30 June 2012 at 13:41

    No doubt about it, stories are dangerous things.

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    1. Steve Green30 June 2012 at 15:54

      Thanks Peter, and that makes us all intrepid adventurers, risking life and limb every time we turn a page, or write a few lines. (It sounds very exciting when put like that, doesn't it?)

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  10. Cindy Vaskova30 June 2012 at 16:07

    Steve amazing visuals you deliver to us with this piece! Quite gruesome, but I loved it.

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    1. Steve Green30 June 2012 at 17:10

      Thanks Cindy, as I replied to John Xero's comment, I like using the mixture of gruesome and humour whenever I can, I'm not always sure if it takes the edge off the violence, or enhances it. :-)

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  11. Chuck Allen1 July 2012 at 13:40

    That's the power of words, I guess. Nicely done, Steve!

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    1. Steve Green1 July 2012 at 20:07

      Thanks Chuck, one might say it was a thumping good read, eh? :-)

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  12. Craig Smith1 July 2012 at 14:59

    I think pretty much a perfect example of flash fiction here Steve, and the story has some great writing advice too. It's what a story should be like.

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    1. Steve Green1 July 2012 at 20:05

      Craig, thank you so much for the very kind words. :-)

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  13. Katherine Hajer1 July 2012 at 18:37

    Ha! I'm never going to be able to read those back-cover blurbs about how a book is "impossible to put down" again. Fun stuff.

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    1. Steve Green1 July 2012 at 20:06

      Heheh! Thanks Katherine.

      I think you'll be okay if you wear an iron mask, that way the hook won't be able to get you.

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  14. Icy Sedgwick3 July 2012 at 08:39

    Visceral indeed! Love the take on the 'hook'.

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    1. Steve Green3 July 2012 at 10:38

      Thanks Icy, if you keep the hook sharp, it'll get 'em every time. Bwuhahahahahaha!!

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