She spoke to me in blues and greys, in dull shades her voice droned on and on.
She could tell I was becoming bored, restless and beige.
Her voice lightened a shade, brightened a shade, the occasional flicker of yellow lifted the mood, piqued my interest.
Richer hues tinged her words, bright greens swirled to the surface mingling with vibrant oranges and dazzling pinks.
As she leant into me her face transformed into an iridescent kaleidoscopic beauty.
We kissed deeply, turquoisely, tongues an intertwining, shifting, glittering rainbow.
We made love in shattering purples and blinding reds.
Eventually, sated, we fell asleep, soothing pastel shades crowded our dreams, eased our hearts.
©2012 Stephen. J. Green.
Nice use of colours Steve, lovely piece of writing!
ReplyDeleteThanks Helen, I wasn't sure if this one really worked or not, I had my own mental image, and hoped that I could convey it successfully.
DeleteA rainbow of couples therapy, my friend.
ReplyDeleteY'know John, I'll bet a swingers party would be like a fireworks display. :)
DeleteI liked this, especially "speaking in blues and greys", and "making love in shattering purples and blinding reds".
ReplyDeleteFor some reason I didn't like the use of the word colour in the piece, or for that matter in the title. Maybe that's just me.
Thanks Peter, actually on the re-read I agree about the word "colours" in the storyline, and so decided to use the word "Hues" instead. I'm going to leave the title alone though, it's a nice simple one, and I kinda like one-word titles.
DeleteBeautifully written Steve and you got the mood of each color perfect. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteHiya Deanna, and thank you, colours can say so much can't they? :)
DeleteReally like this, Steve. A rainbow ride, and yes, quite lovely. =)
ReplyDeleteThanks John, it's another one of those odd ideas that I had, and the story more or less wrote itself. :)
DeleteGorgeous stuff. More than a rainbow too, because you got the neutrals in for the beginning :-). I loved the wordflow.
ReplyDeleteThanks Katherine, with my last post being somewhat downbeat I wanted to post something a shade more uplifting this time. :)
DeleteNeat synaesthete (sp?). I like the how the quality of the colors changes based on the activities.
ReplyDeleteThanks Aidan. I had to google "Synaesthete" and I like the comparison you make. :)
DeleteLovely!
ReplyDeleteHiya Catherine, and thank you. The colours do have a feelgood factor don't they? :)
DeleteIt's a fountain of colors and feelings you've given us with this piece Steve. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteIt definitely brightens up the mood :-) Great writing.
Thanks Cindy. With many of my posts being a bit grim, it's nice to put a heartwarming one on occasionally. :)
Deletemust be something in the air, I did one last week that was 'off colour'! Waaay less gorgeous than this tale of yours
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Thanks Marc. I read your post, a great piece of writing too.
DeleteI actually wrote this three weeks ago, but couldn't post it until this week because we went on holiday, I was very tempted to post it the day before we left but decided not to as I wouldn't have been able to answer the comments.
I dug this. For some reason my mind's eye pictured this done in Bill Sienkiewicz comic panels. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Aaron, both for the kind comment, and for the comparison, I had a look at some of his works, amazing stuff. :)
DeleteI love the word "turquoisely" so much.
ReplyDeleteAlso, thank you for commenting on my #fridayflash. Much appreciated.
Hi Celeste, and thank you for stopping by, the word "turquoisely" just seems to make a statement, doesn't it? I added the "ly" to give it the same ending as "deeply" and liked it immediately.
DeleteYou are very welcome to the comment on your #fridayflash, I very much enjoyed the read. :)
This is absolutely beautiful! "She could tell I was becoming bored, restless and beige" says so much about the colour beige!!
ReplyDeleteHiya Rebecca, and thank you.
DeleteBeige is a word and colour that people associate with bland, and boring, oddly enough, we have a lot of beige in our house, I find the colour very easy on the eye, and relaxing to look at. (Might be a sign of my age too, chuckle.) :)
Such a colourful story. As with most people I have some beige days, some grey days, but it's the rainbow ones I will always remember the most fondly.
ReplyDeleteThanks Craig.
DeleteI think if every day were a rainbow day, then they would just become commonplace, having a rainbow day occasionally makes them so much more memorable, doesn't it? :)
I like that she realized she was losing him & brightened things up a bit!
ReplyDeleteAnd after the nookie… fade to black. :-D
Hahaha!! Oh Larry, this comment did bring a smile to my face.
DeleteThank you. :-D
That was beautiful, Steve. Brilliant use of colors to tell the story.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Danielle, for the very kind comment.
DeleteThe response to this post has been heart warming. :-D
Nice one. I especially like "turquoisely" too.
ReplyDeleteHiya Tim, and thank you. The word does have a certain 'something' doesn't it? :)
DeleteI love colour, and your use of it really brightened this story. You've packed a lot into this one.
ReplyDeleteThanks Icy, it's certainly a long way from the "Going grey" story that I posted a few weeks ago. :-)
DeleteHi there Steve -- a love poem to Synesthesia. Loved all the colours, and an interesting way to tell a story. Almost as if you used one of those pens from the 80s which had five colours you could click down. St.
ReplyDeleteThanks Stephen, I liked this one as soon as I wrote it, it was such a different idea to work with. :-)
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