Friday, 15 August 2014

A stillness in the air (Part 2)

Anyone wishing to read Part 1 can find it here:- A stillness in the air (Part 1)


Before long the red glow thickened, took on form.

The air rapidly grew hotter and heavier as the cloud approached. The thrumming reached almost ear-shattering levels.

Blake buried his face in the ground, his hands clamped tightly over his ears, fear and anger flooded through him as the very earth shook and trembled beneath him.

His whole world became an energy-draining cacophony of howling, whipping winds and deafening, shrieking, bone-shaking vibration. A blinding kaleidoscope of swirling reds and purples, spangled with diamond glints and sizzling blue flashes.

He clung to his sanity for what seemed like an eternity. His screamed prayers snatched from his mouth by the turbulence.

Eventually the assault on his senses lessened as the cloud passed his position. He rolled onto his back and stared at the enemy.

The monstrous, multi-hued, vaporous cloud a hundred feet or so from the ground rolled inexorably toward the citadel.

Blake raised his Minigat and took sight, then faltered indecisively.

There was nothing to shoot at, nothing tangible to target. How do you fight something that has no substance?

Several yards to his left a weapon opened up. The thousands of light pulses per second thrown out by the multi-barrels appeared as one solid stream as it arced up and into the cloud, spraying back and forth in what should have been a murderous firefield.

The cloud just absorbed the rounds and continued on toward the citadel unscathed.

A narrow red beam sliced down from the cloud to touch the shooting soldier. Blake watched in helpless horror as he vanished. No blood spray, no screaming, just a momentary red flash and the soldier disappeared.

Blake watched, transfixed with fear, as the same scenario was repeated time and time again all along the ridge. Hundreds of weapons sprayed into the cloud, and rapidly the army on the ridge vanished beneath a hail of red needles.

The cloud rolled on across the plain as if the engagement had never happened.

Blake dragged himself to his feet. Fighting this thing was futile. Whatever it was, these weapons were useless against it.

There was only one thought on his mind now, Sulya and his daughters, if there was any chance he could save them...

He shouldered his Minigat and set off toward the citadel. After only a few paces he saw the immense Spitlights open up, pouring billions of pulses into the cloud. Even from this distance he could feel the heat from the incredible amount of energy piercing the air.

Hope crept into Blake's heart. Surely nothing could withstand a barrage like that?

Blake watched unbelievingly as once more red beams lanced down. They grew in number until the whole citadel was sheathed in a massive scarlet cloak. The bright light pulses rapidly diminished until there was only red. Bright arterial red.

And then nothing.

No sounds. No firefight... No citadel.

Blake slumped to his knees, allowing the tears to fall freely. There was no-one left to see them, to witness his humiliation.

The cloud seemed to gather in on itself, as if compressing and centralizing its energy. It became smaller, shrinking in on itself until it became a solid red orb. Slowly, slowly it began to rise. Gaining speed and height it flew straight up into the sky until it was lost from sight.

Blake continued on to the citadel. Hoping against hope that Sulya and the girls had somehow survived. They would have been in one of the safer, lower levels, far below ground. They would still be there, there would be more survivors. There had to be.

As he walked he reflected on the other incidents around the planet, the other citadels. No contact had been made with them once the cloud had reached them.

Blake refused to give up hope. The cloud must have destroyed the communications systems in all the citadels. That would be logical, that would explain the lack of contact.

Sulya was still alive. His precious children were still alive. He knew it. With unshakeable certainty Blake knew his family waited for him in those lower levels.

He quickened his pace, his heart soaring. They would flee to the forest, live amongst the trees. His children would grow healthy and strong in the beautiful outdoors.

Two hours later found Blake at the lip of the crater, staring down into the depths of the massive hole in the ground.

Of the citadel nothing remained. Not a brick, shard of metal, shred of flesh. Not a molecule to say there had ever been anything there but earth. The building was gone, right down to the lowest foundation.

~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

It was three days later that the first craft landed.

Blake watched from cover as the huge silver machine settled onto the plain in a whirl of wind and hissing of retro motors.

A ramp slid down from the ship's belly and angled to the ground.

Several small, humanoid creatures walked down the ramp, gathering at the base in a huddle. Conversing animatedly.

Large eyed, blue-skinned heads stood on long necks. They wore grey uniforms, but the lack of helmets told Blake they must find our atmosphere breathable.

He understood now, the cloud was a weapon, not the enemy. This was the enemy.

This was something he could target, something he could shoot at, something he could kill.

Blake stepped out into the open and sighted his minigat. The creatures appeared not to notice him, his Invisuit hiding him from their view. Blake hesitated, concealment would be a precious weapon in his arsenal.

These creatures look physically weak, soft skinned, vulnerable.

Blake grinned widely, a grin that wouldn't reach his eyes, couldn't reach his heart.

He had nothing but time, plenty of ammo, and carried more hate than a man should be capable of.

He would wait, let more come, let them settle, become complacent.

Then he would turn their newly acquired world into a nightmare.

©2014 Stephen. J. Green.


  1. That was all kinds of awesome. Tragedy turned to vengeance. I wish I had something more constructive to say but great story!

    1. Thank you for the lovely comment Catherine, glad you enjoyed the story. :-)

  2. I love a turning plot :-) awesome

    1. Thank you Nadine, you are very kind. Comments like these are very heartening, and make the writing of a story worthwhile. :-)

  3. Wow loved the ending! Excellent second part Steve!

    1. Thanks Helen, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)
      I don't think I'll be adding any more to this, but the ending does leave itself open to more episodes should I decide to continue it later.

  4. not sure if my comment posted? Let me know if it didn't & I'll repost

    1. Hi Marc. Sorry, but I'm afraid it looks like Blogger has stolen your comment, it can be a bit of a pain sometimes, can't it?

  5. Oh this is satisfactory! This is awesome! I'm mentally and visually sent back to the good ol' sci-fi stories which I love with all my heart. Great two-part serial, Steve, fueled with anger and cataclysms and an upcoming war, and this one-man army hero who's about to shred them aliens! That could weapon would look badass on screen.

    1. Glad you enjoyed the conclusion Cindy. I could have taken it in several directions, but was quite satisfied with this scenario. :-)

      Yeah, that minigat would give out some serious firepower, wouldn't it? A kind of hand held, laser-spewing gatling gun, great for those times when you just gotta shred some foes. :-)

  6. A nice set-up to something more, and my interest is most definitely piqued. If someone took my family, there would be some hell to pay as well. So, here I am, cheering your hero on. I hope he gives them a little taste of what mankind can dish out when it's called for. The human spirit is a force to be feared. Good stuff, my friend.

    1. Thanks Stephen. I probably won't be taking story this any further, but i think Blake is quite capable of taking a heavy toll on the invaders, he has the training and the equipment, and he certainly has far more than enough cause and motivation.

  7. That was downright Wellesian. Sort of a reverse of War of the Worlds, where the aliens send us a plague first, and then invade. Great read, and I'd love to hear more if you ever choose to pick it up again!

    1. Thanks Katherine, I don't have any plans to continue this, but then again, I have added to other stories in the past, so it is still possible that I may. :-)

  8. I do wonder how he'll fare when he goes after them. Seems like it could be a tough battle!

    1. Hi Richard. Hit and run tactics usually take a heavy toll over time. The enemy doesn't get much rest either, not knowing when or where the next strike would be.

  9. Aw man, his revenge is going to be EPIC when he gets to it!

    1. I hope so Icy, he certainly has reasons to make it so.