tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post7821175836257999661..comments2023-04-07T13:32:15.954+01:00Comments on The Twisted Quill: A cool breezeSteve Greenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-50260282763724410852015-02-28T22:24:11.678+00:002015-02-28T22:24:11.678+00:00His is not a situation anyone would envy is it Icy...His is not a situation anyone would envy is it Icy?Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-79562638570743865012015-02-28T19:36:59.208+00:002015-02-28T19:36:59.208+00:00Aw that's really sad!Aw that's really sad!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-51232641780530870492015-02-28T12:29:30.972+00:002015-02-28T12:29:30.972+00:00Hi Ally, and welcome to these pages.
Thank you fo...Hi Ally, and welcome to these pages.<br /><br />Thank you for stopping by, and for the lovely comment, I'm glad that you enjoyed the read. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-57607109723817648862015-02-28T12:28:11.973+00:002015-02-28T12:28:11.973+00:00Thank you, Richard. I think his situation would we...Thank you, Richard. I think his situation would wear most people down sooner or later.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-55501065838869840872015-02-28T08:13:46.174+00:002015-02-28T08:13:46.174+00:00Deliciously Dark. Enjoyed
Ally :)Deliciously Dark. Enjoyed<br /><br /><br />Ally :)Ally https://www.blogger.com/profile/09610944444538562368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-56353363349995212692015-02-28T06:14:20.054+00:002015-02-28T06:14:20.054+00:00Nicely done. I liked his character and the way you...Nicely done. I liked his character and the way you described his emotions. He seemed to feel too deeply to go on living.richard bonhttp://liminalfiction.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-15126135123084605662015-02-28T02:17:29.789+00:002015-02-28T02:17:29.789+00:00Thank you, Cindy.
Even if the world had been left...Thank you, Cindy.<br /><br />Even if the world had been left physically beautiful, it would still feel barren if there was no-one left to hug.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-2516847774146679412015-02-28T01:40:13.225+00:002015-02-28T01:40:13.225+00:00Haunting piece. The vastness of that lonely, dead ...Haunting piece. The vastness of that lonely, dead world has crushed him. I wouldn't see a tomorrow, just like he didn't. There simply isn't one. <br /><br />Beautiful writing, Steve. It hit right where it should. We should all go and hug someone. Cindy Vaskovahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747628778627025130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-287731561773576962015-02-27T13:38:54.841+00:002015-02-27T13:38:54.841+00:00I agreen, Jon. Life does have to be worth living t...I agreen, Jon. Life does have to be worth living to be worth keeping. Although, as a species, our will to survive at almost any cost is very strong, I'm not sure that many people would continue to live his existence either.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-67395230370595258442015-02-27T05:05:53.595+00:002015-02-27T05:05:53.595+00:00It is always better to have lived than it is merel...It is always better to have lived than it is merely to have existed. I imagine there were many times he felt much like a ghost wandering through a dead world. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13096021087395266714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-65070778026222472812015-02-23T13:14:34.337+00:002015-02-23T13:14:34.337+00:00It certainly is, Sonia. Let us hope that our world...It certainly is, Sonia. Let us hope that our world never becomes like the one he was about to leave.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-124713613033675372015-02-23T01:09:40.751+00:002015-02-23T01:09:40.751+00:00Oh that is sad. Very sad. Oh that is sad. Very sad. Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-78643756577513717552015-02-21T18:23:16.643+00:002015-02-21T18:23:16.643+00:00Thank you, Chuck. If it is time to go, I think it ...Thank you, Chuck. If it is time to go, I think it would be much better to go with life's happy memories in mind.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-77657465891903286622015-02-21T16:21:56.012+00:002015-02-21T16:21:56.012+00:00That was a very moving piece, Steve. The moment of...That was a very moving piece, Steve. The moment of clarity with his memories at the end was a nice touch. A great reminder of the things that really matter.Chuck Allenhttp://www.chuckallen.us/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-55934796556392996792015-02-21T12:41:17.032+00:002015-02-21T12:41:17.032+00:00Catherine, thank you so much for the lovely commen...Catherine, thank you so much for the lovely comment. :-)<br /><br />Re the teardrop. In Para 5 "It dripped from his chin, creating a miniscule crater of darkness on the dry ground beside his thigh." So, yes, the teardrop did fall to the ground, but...<br /><br />On reflection, unless he had his head to one side, the teardrop would be more likely to land on his chest, or if he was leant forward, between his thighs.<br /><br />I have decided to do a little editing with the teardrop, maybe it will read slightly better now than before.<br /><br />Thank you for the constructive feedback, it is always welcome. :-)<br />Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-20661457181006352472015-02-21T00:24:13.698+00:002015-02-21T00:24:13.698+00:00Thank you, Tim. The readers' feedback from thi...Thank you, Tim. The readers' feedback from this story has been a real confidence boost :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-36303861767306583082015-02-21T00:09:23.900+00:002015-02-21T00:09:23.900+00:00Marc, thank you so much for the very kind words. S...Marc, thank you so much for the very kind words. Some stories work better than others, and it is always good to know when one hits the right spot for the reader.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-71556121518526955032015-02-21T00:06:18.666+00:002015-02-21T00:06:18.666+00:00I think so too. Larry. I don't know if he was ...I think so too. Larry. I don't know if he was the last man on Earth, but I think he believed it to be so.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-91932222514947475212015-02-21T00:04:37.927+00:002015-02-21T00:04:37.927+00:00Thank you David. Survival isn't always enough ...Thank you David. Survival isn't always enough reason to go on living, for many, there has to be more than just an existence.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-31295794805998281462015-02-20T23:59:48.324+00:002015-02-20T23:59:48.324+00:00Helen, thank you very much for this heartening com...Helen, thank you very much for this heartening comment, it is very much appreciated. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-24365108542652079552015-02-20T14:46:57.593+00:002015-02-20T14:46:57.593+00:00Sad and sweet. Nice work.Sad and sweet. Nice work.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-58001323270446924352015-02-20T10:49:19.788+00:002015-02-20T10:49:19.788+00:00This was so beautifully done, so sad and poignant....This was so beautifully done, so sad and poignant. Loved the contrast of the scorched ground with the water below.<br /><br />Just one small thing threw me off a little:<br />> then laid the weapon down by his side, next to the rapidly drying tear stain.<<br />I had trouble picturing this. His tear stain fell all the way to the ground?<br /><br /><br />Again, loved this, the way you revealed the details slowly as we got inside his head. This was wonderful!<br /><br />Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-55934700881515248282015-02-20T08:22:12.686+00:002015-02-20T08:22:12.686+00:00this was a fantastic mix of the emotional but also...this was a fantastic mix of the emotional but also you could really feel the physical sensations of it allSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-32543829078320745012015-02-20T04:11:29.688+00:002015-02-20T04:11:29.688+00:00I suppose it must be that way for the last man on ...I suppose it must be that way for the last man on Earth.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-39108107130472160842015-02-20T04:07:43.214+00:002015-02-20T04:07:43.214+00:00To be the last one standing in desolation, and mem...To be the last one standing in desolation, and memory is all that is left. Moving.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10076907555584959149noreply@blogger.com