tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post2546125946138040451..comments2023-04-07T13:32:15.954+01:00Comments on The Twisted Quill: Please... Don'tSteve Greenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-5217331150577354032012-11-15T21:40:20.005+00:002012-11-15T21:40:20.005+00:00AB, thank you for the very in-depth comment, your ...AB, thank you for the very in-depth comment, your words tell me that the story had the effect I was aiming for.<br /><br />I like working on a low word count whenever possible, although some stories do seem to take on their own life and demand more.<br />As I quite often do, I have left much to the reader's own imagination and interpretation, and it is a real confidence boost when it pays of. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-13198739380250839172012-11-15T18:49:25.224+00:002012-11-15T18:49:25.224+00:00Almost a haiku of hell.
I read my own gloomy taste...Almost a haiku of hell.<br />I read my own gloomy tastes into it at the first, pre-comments reading.<br />There’s that edge – in the story alone I hope – of the violence (large or small) that may follow the addressee’s ignoring the speaker’s pleas… He (?) may become very violent very soon. It’s the sparseness and lightness of touch and form that works here for me. Sure; you can shred someone with a combine harvester – but if you do it with a vegetable mandolin you might only take a finger off, but there’s still someone left alive to hurt further. <br />Perhaps endlessly.<br />AB Singerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05081664992357181626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-75566635986728065922012-11-13T23:47:34.661+00:002012-11-13T23:47:34.661+00:00Thanks Icy. I think I may sometimes be a tad predi...Thanks Icy. I think I may sometimes be a tad predictable, though not disapppointing I hope.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-2802866253964226402012-11-13T12:26:25.361+00:002012-11-13T12:26:25.361+00:00Yeah, this starts out as something relatively ever...Yeah, this starts out as something relatively everyday, a breakup gone wrong, and then it all gets a little dangerous. I wouldn't expect anything less from you!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-29178139906370952792012-11-13T10:42:38.608+00:002012-11-13T10:42:38.608+00:00Thanks Katherine, it basically is a breaking up sc...Thanks Katherine, it basically is a breaking up scenario, which turns a little more dangerous at the ending.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-16529039514123034162012-11-13T02:55:43.672+00:002012-11-13T02:55:43.672+00:00It's amazing how scary a story can be with a f...It's amazing how scary a story can be with a few words. I was thinking of it as a "breaking up" story until the "unpack my suitcase" line came up... that's crossing a line.Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-42082297314177075482012-11-10T21:13:01.050+00:002012-11-10T21:13:01.050+00:00Hiya E.J. And thank you very much for the very kin...Hiya E.J. And thank you very much for the very kind words.<br /><br />I am extremely sorry to learn that this story has similarities to your present circumstances, I sincerely hope it didn't add to your distress, and I hope that things work out good for you in the future.<br /><br />There is nothing to forgive, and no favour to return, I simply left a comment on a story I felt merited it. I send my best wishes to you, both in your personal life, and for any future writing projects you undertake.<br /><br />Steve. Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-62363004278657783432012-11-10T20:57:13.587+00:002012-11-10T20:57:13.587+00:00Hiya Cindy. I think fear of being left to cope alo...Hiya Cindy. I think fear of being left to cope alone, and the uncertainties it brings possibly plays a large part, and adds to the desperation of the situation.<br /><br />In my mind the narrator was female, but I don't say anything about the circumstances that brought the two people to this scenario, once again I leave much to the imagination.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-81752795563629799202012-11-10T20:48:57.283+00:002012-11-10T20:48:57.283+00:00Thank you Richard, the repetition seems to work we...Thank you Richard, the repetition seems to work well with the very short pieces rather than longer ones.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-56699436337816438892012-11-10T19:56:33.992+00:002012-11-10T19:56:33.992+00:00I'm going through something similar to the one...I'm going through something similar to the one leaving.I wish I would of had my bag unpacked.It was lovely all the same in a brokenhearted way.the simplicity helped bring out the sadness(and in a way the longing...or it may just be colored by my outlook).I enjoyed it completely, Steve, from beginning to end(and forgive me for not returning the favor a few weeks back I have been away for a bit)EJ Hobbshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07678857901520016380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-84336703751618627792012-11-10T15:49:30.996+00:002012-11-10T15:49:30.996+00:00Letting go something dear to you is always the har...Letting go something dear to you is always the hardest moment. <br />Some people will even take desperate actions to keep that life which has at the point of breakup turned into something false and only existing on the habbit. Cindy Vaskovahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747628778627025130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-24149875501509376922012-11-10T13:50:36.884+00:002012-11-10T13:50:36.884+00:00I love when you write pieces like this one with a ...I love when you write pieces like this one with a repetitive phrase. The emotion came through in so few words, well done.liminalfictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08762010680878316253noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-7513941020390406312012-11-10T13:04:15.611+00:002012-11-10T13:04:15.611+00:00Good to know!Good to know!Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-25601416573404105272012-11-10T11:08:26.012+00:002012-11-10T11:08:26.012+00:00Absolutely true Craig, it may mean the start of a ...Absolutely true Craig, it may mean the start of a new and better life for one of them, but the process of leaving would still be a difficult time..Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-40217381881588827792012-11-10T11:06:01.114+00:002012-11-10T11:06:01.114+00:00Hi Sonya. Break-ups do tend to bring out the extre...Hi Sonya. Break-ups do tend to bring out the extremes in people, don't they?Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-77517613589327379232012-11-10T11:05:15.882+00:002012-11-10T11:05:15.882+00:00heheh!! Don't worry Tim, it's not a reflec...heheh!! Don't worry Tim, it's not a reflection of my state of mind, or my state of affairs either. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-41114938345018698142012-11-10T08:30:49.322+00:002012-11-10T08:30:49.322+00:00Don't worry I'm not going anywhere ;). And...Don't worry I'm not going anywhere ;). And you're right never easy being on either side of a breakup. Craig Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07176851401465801580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-78138273395563292102012-11-10T01:41:38.447+00:002012-11-10T01:41:38.447+00:00The ex sounds like a little stalker-ish. Suitcases...The ex sounds like a little stalker-ish. Suitcases and suicide threats . . . Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-7294734094842023402012-11-09T20:51:53.075+00:002012-11-09T20:51:53.075+00:00Well, that's a bit of a downer. ;-)Well, that's a bit of a downer. ;-)Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-79914616505057856282012-11-09T20:48:19.388+00:002012-11-09T20:48:19.388+00:00I had to google Beth's music, and yes I can de...I had to google Beth's music, and yes I can definitely see where you draw the parallel marc.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-44218810760944423652012-11-09T20:44:31.203+00:002012-11-09T20:44:31.203+00:00Hi John. I think letting go is probably very hard ...Hi John. I think letting go is probably very hard anyway, even when walking away from a bad relationship.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-77486420258545854512012-11-09T20:43:17.282+00:002012-11-09T20:43:17.282+00:00Hiya Catherine, I didn't think of it like that...Hiya Catherine, I didn't think of it like that, but now you mention it, yes it does. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-80514424442190920282012-11-09T20:42:20.832+00:002012-11-09T20:42:20.832+00:00Hi Larry. Sometimes when a person is on the verge ...Hi Larry. Sometimes when a person is on the verge of walking out on their partner, the other will start unpacking their suitcase in the hope they will stay, although I doubt this would change their mind though.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-72900039263039800702012-11-09T20:39:18.734+00:002012-11-09T20:39:18.734+00:00Thank you Laura, it's a bit sparse, but I didn...Thank you Laura, it's a bit sparse, but I didn't think expanding it would add anything.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-34743134078009114632012-11-09T20:37:02.323+00:002012-11-09T20:37:02.323+00:00This is true Helen, even if you are the one that w...This is true Helen, even if you are the one that wants to leave.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.com