tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post158954187109839420..comments2023-04-07T13:32:15.954+01:00Comments on The Twisted Quill: A diamond for BeverleySteve Greenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-10816379054232366612012-06-10T11:04:30.974+01:002012-06-10T11:04:30.974+01:00Hi Stephen, I agree with your observation, the bea...Hi Stephen, I agree with your observation, the beauty and worth of an offering shouldn't have any connection to the amount of money it cost, sadly for many people though it does.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-30953316130559731152012-06-10T10:21:43.438+01:002012-06-10T10:21:43.438+01:00Hi there Steve -- somehow, the inkier the surround...Hi there Steve -- somehow, the inkier the surroundings, the more 'squatty' the inhabitants, the shiner that ring shone. Thankfully, you had the mount covered -- a piece of gum (otherwise my brain'd be, 'how'd that glass stick on?'). I like it. Cartier eat your heart out. St.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10111660663883108862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-52120647975544332712012-05-31T22:02:55.565+01:002012-05-31T22:02:55.565+01:00Hi Inkyheels, I really appreciate your interpretat...Hi Inkyheels, I really appreciate your interpretation of the story, thank you. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-38058162719560444742012-05-31T21:38:00.158+01:002012-05-31T21:38:00.158+01:00I too really enjoyed the image of cardboard city! ...I too really enjoyed the image of cardboard city! This was a sweet, simple tale with a hint of the melancholy. I loved it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-1094822843899796252012-05-30T21:33:49.559+01:002012-05-30T21:33:49.559+01:00It certainly is Icy, in fact it's nice to see ...It certainly is Icy, in fact it's nice to see love wherever it blossoms. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-26298528888719100572012-05-30T16:53:20.113+01:002012-05-30T16:53:20.113+01:00It's nice to see love blossom in the most unli...It's nice to see love blossom in the most unlikely places.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-48562290928293410652012-05-30T10:49:35.847+01:002012-05-30T10:49:35.847+01:00Thanks Brinda, I haven't really decided yet wh...Thanks Brinda, I haven't really decided yet which way to go with this for a Part 2, so I'm going to leave it for now and see if any ideas grow on me. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-52958779822124664072012-05-30T00:40:21.200+01:002012-05-30T00:40:21.200+01:00It is a lovely story Steve but please write a foll...It is a lovely story Steve but please write a follow on - we must know what is to come of this brave lover wooing the princess with brass and glass? I want to see the princess a bit more if I am to draw my own conclusion :) But I agree, a poetic beggar/homeless man is a true treasure.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-30362867933985461432012-05-28T10:48:43.368+01:002012-05-28T10:48:43.368+01:00Thanks Chuck, quite often it's the things left...Thanks Chuck, quite often it's the things left unwritten that can make a story better, isn't it?Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-83347971246060695572012-05-28T10:47:09.847+01:002012-05-28T10:47:09.847+01:00Thanks Katherine, your take on the story is very i...Thanks Katherine, your take on the story is very interesting, many of my stories are not what they first appear to be, and readers quite often suspect there is something deeper going on, but my idea this time was just simply of love blossoming in the heart of a homeless man.:-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-9092410604435361002012-05-28T05:58:53.646+01:002012-05-28T05:58:53.646+01:00I love this, Steve. The phrasing is terrific, the ...I love this, Steve. The phrasing is terrific, the picture of love in the difficult setting was touching, and the open ending was a great way to end it.Chuck Allenhttp://www.chuckallen.usnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-69319266925112279942012-05-28T04:05:43.121+01:002012-05-28T04:05:43.121+01:00Why do I have a really bad feeling that Beverley i...Why do I have a really bad feeling that Beverley is not necessarily alive (or human, or a life form)?<br /><br />At first this made me think of the curtain-outfit scene in Gone with the Wind, but by the end I was thinking of Magazine's "Permafrost".<br /><br />Both of which allusions, coming from me, are huge compliments. The wad of gum, sticking the jewel to the ring, was really sweet.Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-20279372793213371652012-05-27T21:28:44.437+01:002012-05-27T21:28:44.437+01:00Thanks for the very kind words John, and with some...Thanks for the very kind words John, and with some of the stuff I write "Psychotic" seems to fit perfectly, (strokes favourite cleaver lovingly)...(laughs maniacally) :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-59616302738128359332012-05-27T12:42:36.003+01:002012-05-27T12:42:36.003+01:00Mate, this is wonderful. Simple but effective and ...Mate, this is wonderful. Simple but effective and quite lyrical in places - like the phrase Craig mentioned, and my favourite, <i>"the shine began to shimmy."</i><br /><br />Starts out seeming kind of desperate, maybe psychotic (not at all a thought influenced by reading a lot of your flash ;) ), but totally redeemed in the second half and turned around into something heart-warming and quite lovely.<br /><br />Perfect ending, too. =)John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-16693850001125492512012-05-26T23:25:26.730+01:002012-05-26T23:25:26.730+01:00Hmmmmmm... Something to think on there Tim, thanks...Hmmmmmm... Something to think on there Tim, thanks for the extra feedback. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-76739668882877509882012-05-26T23:07:37.617+01:002012-05-26T23:07:37.617+01:00Maybe you should write two follow-ons, one for yes...Maybe you should write two follow-ons, one for yes and one for no.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-71610246823625523702012-05-26T23:01:21.348+01:002012-05-26T23:01:21.348+01:00Thanks Craig.
That's a very interesting thoug...Thanks Craig.<br /><br />That's a very interesting thought, about the honeymoon, wherever they go... if they go, I think it may well be somewhere rather inexpensive. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-5930107449102745272012-05-26T20:16:13.259+01:002012-05-26T20:16:13.259+01:00"The princess of cardboard city, the dirt-enc..."The princess of cardboard city, the dirt-encrusted duchess of the homeless."<br /><br />Great line Steve!<br /><br />I wonder where they will go for their honeymoon? :)Craig Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07176851401465801580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-16805038345309252332012-05-26T19:31:31.905+01:002012-05-26T19:31:31.905+01:00Thanks Richard, the ring didn't cost anything,...Thanks Richard, the ring didn't cost anything, but he certainly put a lot of feeling into putting it together, and offering it. :-)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-53092096396894237892012-05-26T17:18:58.609+01:002012-05-26T17:18:58.609+01:00Hopefully she'll at least appreciate the effor...Hopefully she'll at least appreciate the effort he put into the ring, and I hope she says yes. I like that you kept it open.liminalfictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08762010680878316253noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-59981528838931440352012-05-26T13:52:35.712+01:002012-05-26T13:52:35.712+01:00Hiya darling, love costs nothing, yet it is pricel...Hiya darling, love costs nothing, yet it is priceless, and something to be treasured. In these circumstances it may be one of the few things that it is in their power to give.<br /><br />Thanks for the lovely comment. X.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-89019334029483868962012-05-26T13:09:10.514+01:002012-05-26T13:09:10.514+01:00I suspect when you're down and out, love may b...I suspect when you're down and out, love may be the most precious thing of all.<br /><br />Nice story Dad xxAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-56155068077500041682012-05-26T10:46:53.345+01:002012-05-26T10:46:53.345+01:00It's true Danni, love can blossom in the most ...It's true Danni, love can blossom in the most unlikeliest of places.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-18560579339818492012012-05-26T10:46:11.998+01:002012-05-26T10:46:11.998+01:00Thanks Tim, it would be nice to see them walk off ...Thanks Tim, it would be nice to see them walk off into the sunset hand in hand, wouldn't it?<br /><br />I just may write a follow-on for this, if I can decide which way to go with it.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2947555836132631506.post-53166775436820158432012-05-26T01:16:48.017+01:002012-05-26T01:16:48.017+01:00You never know when you'll find love. I hope s...You never know when you'll find love. I hope she feels the same.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com